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The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted (Haiku) by OneFingerAnswer

Our lost hiker pines For what he lost with no thoughts For what he still has The moon's beauty is Lost to him as he mourns the Final loss of light By dawn it will be Over for him yet he wants What's already gone Come dawn his eyes will Forever have closed yet He still ignores the stars' light He has reason to Wish for the warmth of the sun Yet denies bird songs And thus is the way A lonely man turns away Your offers of love

OneFingerAnswer 4-Feb-03/3:00 PM
Honestly I'm not sure. Each stanza is a 5-7-5 but it's all meant to be read together. I don't know if each one is a Haiku or if the whole thing collectively is a Haiku. I just wrote the thing. :P




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