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Feeling (Free verse) by chicka_babe05

The touch of your eyes make me feel so good and knowing that I can always count on you I know God gave me this reason that I should the feeling when I'm around you Knowing I'm not in the state of selfhood this sensation I have when I'm with you The feeling can't be withstood the feeling that I want to be known to you I hope you could have the same feeling when I say, "I love you"

==Doylum 4-Feb-03/8:14 AM
This is great. God i wish i could write like you, but as many will confirm i always end up producing a load of old rubbish.

Just one small suggestion, perhaps you could change the last three words to "I wub wou"




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