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Dancers of the Night (Other) by Teen14

Dancing embers call my name "In the fire you'll remain." Sweeping flames of red and yellow Open the door to all that bellows Smoke's a risin' out the chimney top Rising, flowing to the top It screams It wails "Oh fire of hell! Burn away the dark of night!" Dancing little embers shout "The night is young and we're alive flying out the chimney tonight." The fire glows into the night Making all the world a bright Blazing fury of fires call my name "In the fire you'll remain."

Caducus 1-Feb-03/4:36 AM
pretty much agree with JC some nice imgery here, think the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza needs a re-edit, it kind of goes a bit off there but a good read




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