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A Little Nightmare (Lyric) by Teen14

Darling's in her little cage Gomez run away! Fighting off the dizzy haze Gomez run! Tonight our dreams are dressed in black Gomez run away! Feeding underneath our hat Gomez run! Infecting us like a sore Gomez run away! Diving into all our pores Gomez run! Lightning cracks outside this maze Gomez run away! Sweeping deeper in our daze Gomez run! They chase us all through the night! Gomez run away! As we scatter all in fright Gomez run! Scream we might, fight we try Gomez run away! No matter what we all shall die! Gomez run! Please escape my dear friend Gomez run away! For this nightmare... It shall never end.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 1-Feb-03/3:23 AM
Its was just a suggestion, Here have another. Well maybe you could use gomez run! more in the start and gomez run away! towards the middle and gomez run away now! towards the end. Then your still intensify the using your "chorus" and they stay.




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