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Despair (Free verse) by Caducus

Forgive me for all things I didn?t do. Forgive me for ever meeting you. Forgive me for trying to be something I am not. Forgive me for the incapability of being unable to stop. Forgive me for kissing you and whispering her name. Forgive me for wishing for you, for when you came. Let me take away your pain, Let me walk away for I was a thorn in your side, And father forgive me for being born, For from the first breath exhaled I had died. Forgive me for the times I made you despair. Forgive me for a future without me there. Forgive me for my failed attempt at suicide. Forgive me for being the reason you always cried. Forgive me for my lack of belief. Forgive me for your grief. Forgive me for becoming so depressed. Forgive me for failing to be the best. Forgive me for letting you down. Forgive me for the thorns that I wore in my crown. Forgive me for watching over you from where I am. Forgive me for failing to understand, The reasons why I refused the helping hand. All I pray is I will be in a better place, Where every Cherub has my baby?s face. Where every infant sleeps and awakens, Where hearts are immune to breaking, In death I will be one with ?Cara?, In any life form, she will always be warm, For I am her adoring Father.

Ranger 31-Jan-03/12:56 PM
Caducus, perhaps you should split it up so that the 'forgive me's are in seperate stanzas from the rest? It might add a little to the structure.




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