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Afterglow (Free verse) by Imperfections

Long after the burn in my eyes from the words that you said and the burn in my thighs from the night in your bed fades away, your voice still plays like a song in my head through the day.

Imperfections 27-Jan-03/4:22 PM
oops! I accidentally deleted a really constructive comment from zzinnia66. You're right about that last line. It does nothing for the meaning, I put it there more or less to even out the rhythem. I'll have to work on a new way to end that thought.




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