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3.85g (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

The void is inside and out it pushed me down stole my pride attempting to leave me dead inside From the void she could not run or hide only sit, shit ,vomit, or die you see the VOID is not dead inside feeding on conciousness like and endless feast the void is lord and conqueror of the darkest of beast trying to e-qu@te function to form this void is a vagabond and hardly the norm Far removed from what the mind can see this void is dead in you and me?

Bill Z Bub 25-Jan-03/7:08 PM
liked the first two stanzas, but the second half lost me.




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