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Together Forever (Free verse) by Sarahmarie

Last night I had a dream I dreamt of wings I was flying Flying away from reality Away from this horrible place to somewhere unbelieveable A place where you and I could be together Together forever without the people that think we are wrong We were in our own little world-happy Then the phone rang I woke up to someone telling me you told another lie If only I could sleep forever We would stay eternally happy But instead we are stuck in this dreadful place called- Reality.

Imperfections 21-Jan-03/11:10 PM
Good work, my favorite of what I have read of yours. I like where you put "the phone rings" line, it does a good job of both dividing and connecting your thoughts.




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