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she said (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

bodily proximity, pheromones, chemicals and whispered tones, entangled lives, or lonely souls; this is not love she said, with a bright lop-sided grin, pushing me down again to the mattress' wrinkled skin.

Imperfections 21-Jan-03/10:49 PM
Love this. However, I think the "yearning souls" take you away from your point. Unless I am all wrong, and that is exactly the point you're trying to make, sneaky you :)




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