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infector (Free verse) by zotsf

playing at the playground rife with virus running on the equipment a scream in the lung rolling on the sofa soft as mama soiling a daiper leaking the infector

anonymous 22-Jun-01/3:23 PM
good use of words, sense of form, but my initial reaction is you don't pull off whatever you are trying to accomplish. Go for it again (it's short enough).




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