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DID YOU EVER? (Free verse) by emrldeyz79

DID YOU EVER LOVE SOMEONE BUT KNEW THEY DID NOT CARE? DID YOU EVER WANT TO CRY BUT KNEW IT WOULD GET YOU NOWHERE? DID YOU EVER LOOK INTO THEIR HEART AND WISH THAT YOU WERE THERE? DID YOU EVER WATCH THEM WALK AWAY, NOT WANTING THEM TO GO. AND WHISPER "GOD I LOVE YOU" BUT NEVER LET THEM KNOW? YOU WLL CRY ALL NIGHT IN MISERY AND ALMOST GO INSANE. THERE IS NOTHING IN THE WHOLE WIDE WORLD THAT CAUSES SO MUCH PAIN. IF I COULD CHOOSE BETWEEN LOVE AND DEATH, I THINK I WOULD RATHER DIE. LOVE IS FUN BUT IT HURTS SO MUCH. THE PRICE YOU PAY IS HIGH. AND SO MY FRIEND, YOU WILL BE HURT, YOU KNOW, BEFORE IT IS THROUGH, YOU SEE MY FRIEND, I OUGHT TO KNOW, FOR I FELL IN LOVE WITH YOU.

Quarton 14-Jan-03/8:56 AM
Too mawkish in content. A bit of subtlety would help. It currently reads like a Hallmark card and the message offers nothing new. Sorry but this just doesn't work for me.




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