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Random thoughts poem-do not try to find a meaning for there are too many. (Free verse) by lunar

I am removed, just drifting, On a sea of lost hopes On waves of mixed feelings. Their lives are petty, Their struggles in vain, But still they have a hold on me, Although i am so changed. I cant believe i lost your trust, somewhere along the way, Although i know i am to blame, I cant think what to say. Their game is one i cannot play, Their rules i do not know, If only i had taken a different way And not gone all alone.

smlink84 13-Jan-03/8:30 PM
It's good, but get the emotions organized and not so vague. 7




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