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That's What It's all about. (Free verse) by madjack2

Tales untold, The days of old, Of heros in the fight, Of a flight in the night, Of adventure and love, Of innocence like that of a newborn dove, Of life and death, Of one's last breath, That's what it's all about. To pillage and plunder, The darkness we're under, Of feeble hope, Of learning to cope, Of the hero's light, Of God's fantastic might, Of journies yet to come, Of where we're from, That's what it's all about.

anonymous 22-Jun-01/1:25 PM
The title (and mirrored lines) give it a much lighter feel -- (reminds me of a children's song). Could make a good heavy metal riff, maybe. The rhythm mostly works; "Of innocence [...]" doesn't work as well as the rest. :)




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