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Another Day (Free verse) by Brighteyes

When can one self claim all of their fantasies? What if the rain never stops? Could have one sweet chance not to erase the hope. Well if I feel I will... Falling asleep, I cannot stay awake. Wish I could live to see another day... When can one self hope to be more than the dream? Where does the wish finally end? Should be more than luck that brings me here to-day. Well it's not I'll die... Falling asleep, I cannot stay in time... Wish I could stay awake, another day...

hipster flare 13-Jan-03/9:53 AM
sounds troubled--like a therapy poem. I hope you are feeling better, but you should keep therapy poems to yourself--too often thet sound exactly like this and come across as trite.




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