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Through the eyes of life (Free verse) by Angel_of_fait

You are sick and so am i. we live and live untill we die. our lives will pass frome time to time. just so we can be of mind. we see our children laugh and play. we see our children grow each day. one day we saw our first grandchild. our hearts was beating so fast we smiled. where hase the time gone. maybe if we se our past then we will be at peace at last. Victoria Shanelle Nixon

nentwined 9-Jul-02/3:00 AM
until has one l.
I don't understand "of mind".
our hearts *were* beating
hase -> has.
se -> see.

a cute poem, but didn't really move me.




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