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Caged (Free verse) by TxMstng02

Pounding against the cage Like a beast inside Breaking free Living to die Memories of afar Where they will never go Here to stay Forever alone Living to serve But only one master Love and hate show no mercy Waiting for the time after Sores of pain Bleed from inside A tiny prayer is said Wishing to die Escape from cruelty On the inside Cracks of pain Cry out with no shame The torture has no end One after the other They come to die In front of millions Who dare to cry One tear is shed Nothing ends Alone here forever Until the time is end Pounding against the cage Yet nothing is inside Only memories Of past Which will only hide Covered up from all that wishes to see The torture Until set free

Caducus 3-Jan-03/9:28 AM
just read that your only 18, I am 29 and have written poetry since I was 14, this is quite mature for your age. Keep choosing subjects that interest you, try to avoid forcing yourself to write.
Some good advice: accept constructive criticism from the users on this site, most are cool only a few are vacuous twats, there will be some users you will hate to begin with but they are the ones you will respect as most are honest, some very crafty, some will decimate your work, some wont, sometimes the vote system will confuse you, sometimes a top poet will give you a 10 and another top poet will give you a zero, its all about taste, pathos and whether you are respected. Try and be courteous by offering critique on other peoples work. Their are some hidden diamonds on this site and one day when we're all dead we'll be rich.

Good luck, now I'm off to lose another game of football




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