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The Sadistic Mirth (Free verse) by Freethinker1602

The breath of air I breathe Is drawn in a sharp gasp And then to exhale is a long Piercing shriek That I alone can hear My life exists in agony My existance in suffering And I suffer in desolation I refuse to move Refuse to allow myself to heal It is my hand that causes the pain I am the murderer I bring Pain to the innocent My death would be welcome To those that have reason to hate It is my time to seek a Vengeance so unjust that I Am marked as an evil force I am the beast unleashed Know my pain

Bobjim 2-Jan-03/8:28 AM
Pian? surely pain. sorry, but it did kinda ruin it. Redo it and you get a 9. as it is, a well deserved 8.




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