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The world (Free verse) by Sugarbbybuttrfly

An endless pit of darkness and pain A marathon race stopped by the rain The sun never shine The water never flows And endless book of lines The sadness only grows The world

Caducus 2-Jan-03/5:27 AM
Not too bad but book should be replaced by endless lines that frown upon mankind, but its your baby, think you should play around with this it could be VERY good instead of well - good ! heres a 7




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