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Front, Porch, Swing. (Free verse) by horus8

Every evening she smokes cigarettes on her front porch Riding that swing All of her gestures pause She's not waiting for that special someone's home lighting torch If the swing could speak it would say, "because", Because, my friend Time blindfolded the farm animals The bonfire out front is hot enough now To melt the toy metal trucks Intense enough now to burn the swing, and the house with shed The only things left Would be the tiny flowered weeds The aphids for the ladybugs Her eyes show this knowledge She was the child i loved more than myself That spit at the circus Peed behind the ferris wheel Shin kicked the ring master and gave all of the clowns a raise Lost within the house of mirrors No razor No bottle of depressants Liar Only cotton candy I loved you, distempered Mouth melting and sugar soaked, anger Don't cut you Never trust a stranger I need you Or, a mustached man Father Or, a girdled woman Mother Or, the freckled children Siblings Because they don't follow you around like i do I'm sorry that i came too late to pump you're guts I guess i'm gutless Fertilizer for your milkweed One day too You Out there Will sit quiet Chain-smoking On somebody else's front, porch, swing dragging your feet to simply slow down.

god'swife 30-Dec-02/7:01 PM
Nothing good with Jeremi lasts forever. It comes and gos, he loves Nadine regardless of what he may have told you. Everybody loves Nadine, she is completely lovely. She's not educated but she's smart in many ways. She's a wonderful person and quite frankly an idiot for putting up with some of Jeremi's shit. I couldn't do it, and neither could you, don't fool yourself, you'd have to be somewhat submissive to be able to deal with living with Jeremi. He's moody. He might love you today and then hate you tomorrow, He will talk to you intimately one night and then not speak to you for days. Quite frankly you are making yourself look childish. I believe he's being an ass to you because you're pulling a Jerry Springer on him. You're probably making him hate you. Tell me, what is your purpose in participating on this site? Are you trying to improve your poetry skills? As they say in acting "What do you want in this scene"? Is your love going to save him from himself? "Caught in a weird situation" of his own making. Jeremi is incapable of the kind of love you expect from him.




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