nentwined28 Dec 2002

I understand how hard it can be to work these things... overall I like the piece, but:

"Then I first espied her.
She had beauty to excess!
A laugh to shiver spines -
A Galician princess.

What mystic Yorkshire root
Was stirred in quiemada?
What supernatural spice
Was robbed from heaven's larder?"

really don't work for me. they stumble and may have even broken something.