ecargo26 Dec 2002

Talismans--I love talismans. Longer doesn't mean not tighter here--I like the added lines a lot, the playing with sounds, the internal near-rhymes. Regarding lacy crunchings--the image works, and that's the main thing; you're right to keep it. The last line still doesn't seem quite there, but I'm not sure why--that's not especially helpful I know, but there you have it. Nonetheless, this is excellent.