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When Im Gone (Free verse) by New Life Drug

[still working on this one] When I'm gone Make Sure you take the pictures 1.Nestle them safe in a box 2.Throw in the Pacific Ocean Make sure you dont read my notebook 1.Simply burn the awful words 2.Scatter in the Puget Sound Be careful to take my teddy bear 1.Kiss him gently from my childhood 2.Place on my early grave Be sure to make use of my old room 1. Rent it out 2. Make it a guest room I dare you not to leave my things in the dust I couldnt stand to leave them untouched Just lying there... After I'm Gone And tell my friends I loved them 1. find the people who were important to me 2. speak softly Oh imagine The poor furniture, lying in the still The spiders and winter air, on my window sill Leave the shutters closed Just because I'm gone it doesnt mean that sunlight should come in like you always wanted it to.

Bill Z Bub 19-Dec-02/7:49 PM
Keep working on it. It's starting to shape up nicely.
I love these lines:
"Simply burn the awful words"
"I dare you not to leave my things in the dust"
and
"Oh imagine
The poor furniture"
~sniff~
poor, poor furniture...




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