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Shackles of Reality (Free verse) by rick

I see it swinging open Wide and unobstructed No obstacles block my path My future is on the other side Stepping through the door I cast away my past Look from the other side The iron gate is closing Shackles of reality Are set upon my ankles Feel the sentence of my age No longer am I free Imprisoned in my future My time is for my crime I pay the price we all must pay Is birth a felony?

Quarton 19-Dec-02/2:26 PM
rick,
I liked this a lot. Good metaphor and imagery to enhance the poems content. Almost great but still worthy of an eight.




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