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Misplaced admoration (Free verse) by deep-as-a-puddle

Our paths do cross but your head it never turns, Inside of me i feel my heart yearn. For months i turned myself around, but your love i never found. When valentines came and two became on face, still my admoration i misplaced. For days on end i would dream of you, until one night that dream fell through. The cold, harsh snow melted away, and through the night broke the day. For once i was in darkness, now in light, I have laid to rest my eternal fight.

lunar 19-Dec-02/1:27 PM
This doesnt really make sense, plus it does seem you have changed to make it rhyme but i do quite like it but its not really the type of poem i relate to! xx




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