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Are You? (Free verse) by NewbieMe

Don't you feel like dying? Don't you feel like wanting to go? Don't you feel like hating? Don't you feel like ending it all? Don't you feel like lying? Pretend everything's okay? Don't you feel like dying? And make it all go away? [Pondering and wondering. I know almost everyone has felt this way.]

Caducus 16-Dec-02/6:07 AM
Not entirely memorable or original, try and explain the concept of suicide in a less trivial manner. You have to be, or had to be genuinely suicidal to write about suicide and hit people in a way they will think on what you have said. Dont be disheartened through malice in peoples criticism, answer them through your work and silent tongues will deafen you from what you created. Just gather inspiration, never force an emotion let it force you to write.




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