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Xmas gifts list (Other) by lunar

For him: 1)Wings. So he can be free from the tormment of his thoughts. 2)A key. So he can unlock the cage of his mind. 3)Love. So he will not suffer anymore. For her: 1) A map. So she knows which route she will take next. 2) A tongue. So she can speak what is in her mind. 3) Hope. So she knows these feelings are not in vain.

poetandknowit 12-Dec-02/1:49 PM
Ahhh. Come on. I gave you constructive criticism. I said erase what you have and write it over using better words that form better images. If oyu can do that task maybe you will achieve something besides crap.




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