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she said (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

bodily proximity, pheromones, chemicals and whispered tones, entangled lives, or lonely souls; this is not love she said, with a bright lop-sided grin, pushing me down again to the mattress' wrinkled skin.

Bill Z Bub 3-Dec-02/10:24 PM
Hmm. Oddly, it was all one stanza originally. I decided to separate the lines at the last minute as an aid to the rhythm. Your suggestion is under consideration.
Thanks, Rebecca.




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