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Pretty Skin Deep (Free verse) by confuzdlilgirl

She brings him on and leads the way But a different thing happens one day She used to have that touch and smile That would make everyone love her wild But then comes the familiar rejection She looses with guys that little connection Now its again like the past her time with guys has moved too fast She lost them all before she ever gained any She don't see what's, so obvious to many She'll make a wish that's already come true For the beauty within to shine right through Everyone wants to be admired and loved by all Think if they aren't, then they will fall She knows better then to just have vanity Because in the real world its only reality Beauty is within and pretty skin deep So which one do we wish to be??

ecargo 3-Dec-02/3:52 PM
Great title for a punk rock song--Why not play with it--"pretty skin deep," word sounds, word play, stream of consciousness, and see what happens when you don't concentrate on rhymes and telling a tale.




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