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Afraid (Other) by LovePoet

I'm afraid to tell what's truly in my heart, I'm afraid to tell you the doubts I've had from the start. You say you love me but I never will forget The day you left me and to her instead. You've broken my heart and I've broken yours, But I cannot help but thinking you are still her's. Is this true, is your heart not only mine? As I think this I try to sit back and not cry. I don't want my heart broken again. That's why I am afraid.

Caducus 2-Dec-02/4:51 AM
The text doewsnt justify the title enough, I had no empathy for the character. Try and tell a story less predictably, give us the fear, make it more tangible, as it stands it leaves me barren of any feeling or reaction, go for it keep on trying. (will vote on a re edit)




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