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Wanting (Free verse) by Sugarbbybuttrfly

The world don't want me here No one wants to see How beautiful I really am And how wonderful I can be They just see a girl Thats depressed and sad And doesn't know the meaning of being glad But on the inside shes slowly dying from being alone No one notices or calls on the phone All she wants is someone to love She used to think that love was from above But shes lost her faith, it is no more She'll never find the love, shes truly longing for.

debased 30-Nov-02/4:37 PM
its good but i really dont like the line "she used to think that love was from above" it throws the whole thing off for me. good poem tho i really like the begining 7




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