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my soul i give (Other) by roxy

Here I sit, all alone no one to talk to, my tears unknown. As I lie I cry me to sleep, I pray to the Heavens my soul to keep. I hope its the right decision I wish it no mistake, I don't mean to hurt anyone but my heart can no longer ache. The pain hurt too much I couldn't bear it no longer, This wouldn't have happened if I'd been a bit stronger. If i had some support it would have been different, but there was no one around to even glimpse at the hint. But now it's my choice it's the last one I'll make, for when I got to bed tonight tomorrow won't wake. I'm sorry I hurt you I love you, I do, but no one understood me nobody knew. So here's my decision i don't want to live, as I lie here and die to the heaven's, my soul I give.

Caducus 28-Nov-02/1:44 AM
so/so it needs identifying as a poem or lyric, try it as a lyric and wrench the heart more, as it stands its mediocre, could be good though, play with it (the poem) that is




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