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Exhaustion (Free verse) by vulcan

She answered Yes To my languid eyes I whispered "what?" She became my mistress.

Bill Z Bub 27-Nov-02/5:02 PM
This does not comply with the dictates of logical poetics.

But seriously, theres something about the word "mistress" that I just don't like. But I was going along with it until the final line.
Maybe if it was made into a Haiku?




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