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Check Yourself (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

"Shit happens", they say. I still can't figure why the judge went that way. Coffee in hand, driving along minding my business then something went wrong. Laid up, felt like a slob shoulder out three months replaced, lost my job. With the wife and kids the house went somewhere I'm alone, so here I sits. No, I'm no everyday jerk I'm just broke and homeless, I was on my way to work.

Caducus 27-Nov-02/2:30 AM
Wondered where you were, Greetings and Salutations !
I liked the vibe in this piece but take it or leave it heres a last line i think could end it.....

Fuck ! life can be so acrimonious.

anyway drag this 7 by the hair and drag her away.




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