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Another Chance (Free verse) by Bonehiss

If I had another chance To live my life with you, My path would have a heart once more My soul would be as new, I'd show the world my love for you My beloved jewel, my bride, I'd never seek another I'd be always by your side, And when my final days drew near I'd face the setting sun, To dream through all eternity Of the life we shared as one.

Caducus 26-Nov-02/5:40 AM
I always find it difficult to rate your work as your obviously a hopeless romantic, who writes unchallenging, simple writings. I'm giving you a 6 on this because their is a purity to your work. However I have to criticize you on one aspect and that is the lack of originality in your work, it is a very basic 'greeting card' style with little fibre and alluring qualities.

Fair play to you though, none of us here are Hemingway at the moment, just lose yourself more in your imagination and you'll find more satisfaction in your creativity.




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