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missing you (Free verse) by Goose

I remember when I used to wait with baited breath for your call We discussed it all Then we would discuss it again That was when you would tell me a dirty joke Then poke fun at my reaction Then came lives and distraction The calls began to fade

Christof 19-Nov-02/8:03 AM
The bit about the dirty joke is good, but I don't think you need the last two lines. It would be better left to just tail off, like your relationship.




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