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"Why would I need to get in touch with you?" (Free verse) by Limness

The weight of those words crushes me The mean in between /that you did not think/ sinks /and i bleed quietly/ It's nothing It's nothing You didn't blink

god'swife 18-Nov-02/1:45 PM
Too anorexic. I think 'The weight of those words" would add some much needed direction. Also try title in qoutes. What do you think?




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