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Wind Whisper (Free verse) by abbaslittleclingon

I love to hear the wind Whisper so soft and so kind Surrounding my spirit my soul and my mind He blends with a mist from the depths of the sea And the two become one with nature and me I am watching the stars in their beauty and grace A dazzling fire suspended in space With the waves rolling in determined and strong Filling my heart with a heavenly song Ah,The Lilly Of The Valley is beckoning me My Refuge and strength in the midst of the sea authorL.G-O.

god'swife 18-Nov-02/1:41 PM
Not bad. Antiquiated, but it the rythmn doesn;t detract from the sense of it. Or in ohter words you managed it without having to revert to silly sentences.




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