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The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams (Free verse) by Caducus

Crocodiles drown in synchronized sorrow, Church bells ring, the ringing so hollow. Am I the only one to mourn you? Crows dressed as humans have come to scorn you. You took so long to be taken, Too long for the vultures who circled above, In heaven your dreams awaken, A simple dream called love. I sit in your wooden armchair of similar dreams, And close my eyes to familiar scenes. The screaming, the stench, The scheming, the wench. The derelict peace now fills the room, Hibiscus covered walls now a dying bloom. The greatest gift you left, ensuring life and not existence, Is exhaled in my breath. ( for Dannara )

god'swife 14-Nov-02/9:02 AM
There's a lot of wonderful language here I especially like "The derilict peace" that images I think is an important one, for me anyway. "Ensuring life and not existence" makes me say 'fuck'... but in a good way. Unfortunately my less favorite rhyme(love/above) is also found here. When ever I see the word above at the end of a line I know the word love is not far behind. Ha, I made a poe-m!




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