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The Real You (Free verse) by jonny2000

Always new, Always cool, He think he rule, wearing shiny shoes, wearing baggy blues, flip, flopping, sliding up and down the avenues, Looking tough, wearing rough, big and buff, He got all the stuff, Or does he? you see, I see what no others see, I see past the buff the walking tough, the wearing rough, Others see the shell of the turtle walking proudly downward the street, I see the inside, the nice, the soft, and the heart, I see the real you. by jonny2000

god'swife 13-Nov-02/2:16 PM
So your 12. Fantastic your poem needs a little help, but I can't imagine my son writing anything close so I'll give you 4 for the poem and 3 for having the courage to write poetry. Post some more. The second line seems to have a typo, or did you mean to leave the 's' off of think and he? Try writing this without having to rhyme. I'm curious to see what that looks like.




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