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Complete Futility (Lyric) by ellisonandrew

This is silence is killing the peace and tranquility the complete futility that lies deep inside of me The storm comes so rapidly and takes a control of me and washes me away hoplessly and soaks me relentlessly this war without words this acceptance of pointlessness is holding me up quietly while you drift away from me and theres nothing I can do thats what I tell myself anyway I've nothing left for you as you walk away

Roisin 9-Nov-02/6:39 AM
This got me! Brilliant up to the last stanza where the rhythm and flow need a little work as it doesn't fit in so well with the rest of the poem. other than that, a heart felt piece with carefully selected choice of words. Nice one!




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