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My New Enemy??? (Free verse) by fallrocks87

U told me once that it was true U said one time that I would never leave u I believed all your lies and promises What could I do? All I could do was sit here and cry And try to build up the courage to say goodbye U hurt me for the last time And now I am threw I don???t want to let u go BUT???I have to???I know I do I can???t stand the pain anymore and the hurt I did expect some emotions but all u did was smirk But that is ok because u are a BIG JERK I tried to be nice, I tried to be calm But boy this was the last draw U meant the world to me, and u were my everything But now I know that u are my new enemy

Roisin 9-Nov-02/5:00 AM
First four stanza show real emotion and the realization of a dilemma that the reader can really relate to. It doesn't flow as well as it could. the last two stanza are a bit childish with words like "boy" and "jerk". Poem did move me however but perhaps that's because i have just been fucked over myself!




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