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Jerk ?? Circle (Free verse) by horus8

Valentine candy Warmed to mush There's my lover To much blush Murder tools litter The dry dim abode My hands are crying They want to try Sneaky tweak freak Last but fast Helmeted soldier Hankin half-mast Tingling tiny Trinkets to toast Tornado-tattooed Tater-tots to trace Tilted twisting tacos This Thursday Towards twilight Then toss Tuesday's tuxedo Tenderly taken Tutoring Todd The twinky-taster She wants to hurt me Because she loves me Abuse becomes symbolic I read the Braille On your face Even in my social blindness Insisting only On temporary fondness Resisting thrusts The container busts Our savings spilled loans and trusts Spreading uncounted Like bengied chickens Let's do Geomancy For dear Caesar February children Mostly my siblings Pisces lover Underneath covers Red-light bathed Two faces blooming One is trying The other dying Chocolate coats the truth Do martinis attract vermouth? Masturbating with Dr. Ruth Murderers still love In their blunted Lurching strokes The knife is plastic and many-toothed I need that and a spork For my salad eating Pyre of fire We're all soon to be casualties Of a lover's consumed desire To finish quick and roll over Faster! Good boy! Now play dead

god'swife 5-Nov-02/12:21 AM
I am completely dumbfounded and in awe of this comment. You sir are too brilliant for anyone's good. Why do you choose your subject matter as you do? Again you are a flawless and elegant marksman. I pray somewhere on this earth your talents are being used for good instead of evil. I guess that makes me the worst sort of naive bimbo. Oh well. I grow fonder of you every month. Like a pet anaconda who elegantly swallows the neighbors chihuahua, I don't know whether you should be destroyed or rewarded.




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