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Youth Fair (Free verse) by daniella

..................................................... Beautiful view of laundered yards, A church, a schoolyard, shooting gallery. Buy your token at the far-right stand. Take your turn. You Lost? Do come again. When the sticky pink cotton dress Gets stuck between your thighs, You'll remember all those days, all those ways of making it up.

poetandknowit 4-Nov-02/9:27 PM
"When the sticky pink cotton dress
Gets stuck between your thighs" -- Excellent visual and rhythmic line, but the last two lines do not match it and the poem loses me a bit. After you nail something like that, a major league line, I expect the whole poem to follow. But a nice draft all the same.




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