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untitled (Free verse) by bluwiz

pale moon shines with borrowed fire as the flames of sun cool in the sea and she sits on embers ghosts of faraway suns long since vanquished by dark's cool fingers and men in awe worship rocks as they burn burn burn in times and places far

poetandknowit 4-Nov-02/10:42 AM
I guess you are on the right track as far a creating an image. Unfortunately, your age is showing here. But at least it is not a whiny pimple poem.




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