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ITS A SHAMBLES (Free verse) by lukehanney

You're wet and humiliated, With this club you're not affliated, Soggy steak and kidney pie, On a cold, wet day in mid-july, Arms and legs aching and sore, All of this for a 0-0 draw.

poetandknowit 4-Nov-02/7:52 AM
Why direct voice? This is under 25 words and you use "wet" twice. Maybe you should pick another. Other than that, you might be on to something.




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