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the place (Free verse) by ThreeFourSix

They say there was a place, A time when the Gods were young, Where you and me could run and chase, And try, oh try, to live as one. This place they say was one of love, Where flowers bloomed and poets dreamed, A magic glade, a magic dove, The sunshine shined and moonbeams beamed. Take me there? Thats what you say? Its gone my love, the memories fade, But I have a secret, Ill show you the way, Creations of love and how they were made. A whisper of truth that was once strong, Ages past in this special place, But now its just simply been too long, Since Gods and Goddess' looked upon your face. See you are the secret, youll find the way, The choices are hard, the paths unknown, The decision is yours, to make one day, Your love will soar, you wont be alone.

ThreeFourSix 27-Oct-02/3:23 PM
negative feedback is great. especially to someone like me who has never written poetry before. i thank you. i will heed your advise in future poems i write. now, just some advise for you. by all means as i said give negative feedback on someones work, if they are half as mature as they should be they know not to take any advise personally. however when people give offensive and negative PERSONAL feedback to someone, it can be quite damaging. your opening sentence in your reply does just that. fortunately, i recognised your criticism as an attempted constructiveness. try to be more careful because you may just offend someone more fragile than me. thanks again for your input.




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