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The Canvassers (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

By streets where people live in council sprawl The doors go on forever and so did we, We argued out our case in public halls: 'We must convince the people to be free!' We thought of metaphysical concrete dreams And hoped for days when solid things would die We went out to the wilderness, it seemed - And knew the only option was to lie: We had to propogate a sense of hope And demonstrate to what it might just lead Our ideology is not a joke But our campaign has many, varied needs: Our opponents spend their millions to buy trust, While all that we can say is 'Vote For Us'.

Christof 23-Oct-02/1:30 AM
I like the sense of compromise that comes over in this. I wonder if it should be 'On streets' not 'By streets' - do you say that doors are 'by' streets? Dunno. I'm a pedant. I like the 'metaphysical concrete dreams'.




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