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Hunt (Free verse) by cobalt

Greener than the leaves irridescent heads glint against a dun river's shimmery lap, lulled Instantly uncradled, slivers of blue flash from unfurling wings burst heavenward as shot shatters silence in the reeds He sits silent, blinded awaits the fall

Christof 21-Oct-02/7:28 AM
'awaits the fall' is good - it makes me think if fall of man, as if something less than innocent is going on which he is too blind to see.




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