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Moon and Azalea (Haiku) by Aidaho

Moon and azalea. Scent of flower frames the night. I remember you.

anonymous 19-May-02/12:45 AM
pretty but without internal dynamic; just two images together, inner and outer; no link. like "frames the night".

does the memory "frame" the internal night, mind that would be terrible if miswritten, only possible dynamic I can see.




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