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regret. (Free verse) by darby pyn

What a hollow faith you have in mind to leave your memories behind you know yourself much better than you think. bored contention bleeds late arrivals eyes on contact stare reprisals. numb a promise with contradiction lie in your sleep wake up alone. spinning down above my face focused on my past mistakes. naked like a new born poem caught between hell and home.

god'swife 18-Oct-02/8:14 PM
Much better. I'm glad you like my poems, they are my best friends. I think you should put a stop after 'memories behind'. Either a period or drop the following words down to the next line, also a stop after 'arrivals' would help. I like -=Dark_Angel=- also. Shhh, don't tell. I f you're interested in hearing what one of my poems sounds like you can find me at www.gangbox.com. It's Horus8's website and he was kind enough to let me record at his place last night. Check out his recordings I have the feeling you'd love them. Saw the Buzzcocks live last month, they were great.




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